Blue Fairy

this story is amazing. I love it. It was really hard to find anything to critique. the setting and descriptions were great. the only thing I could think of is: ...

I think you wondered away from what you were talking about at the start which is ok but the start was really good. it didn't make sense by the end ...

hi welcome to YWS. :D Is the first part of the first chapter or is this the whole of it? any way which ever one it is I thought it ...

I loved it. the interaction between the doctor and rose was great. I never thought how jealous martha would be if rose came back it was really good. I couldn't ...

This is a good start. I love the descriptions and the graveyard gave it more effect. I couldn't find much to critique. His skin was burnt charcoal black. There were ...

you have a really good idea here but the punctuation made some parts quite hard to read. Oriana Nyx stirred in her sleep the curtain of black hair, which framed ...

This story was so great. it really scared me. *shivers I could only find a few small things to critique. Where adults allowed being scared in movies? I didn't understand ...

this scene is really good. i couldn't find many big things to critique just small suggestions. Father and daughter took their rightful place at the top of the table I ...

this is really good. i loved the way you strung the thoughts of the person together with desciptions of his surroundings. you also described others people well so that anyone ...

firstly i think this story goes through things too quickly. it seems more like someone explaining something to someone else when they don't have much time if you know what ...

hi this is really good. you can really feel the emotions of Michael. the torando is described strongly too. :D the only thing I think you could have improved is ...

I have nothing against emos. But it just makes me disgusted when they complain about people teasing them for being emo, and then calling themselves emo! i agree it so ...

hehehe this is really good and its true. I bet almost everyone feels like that sometimes. I'm always being kicked off the computer just when i'm about to write oh ...

it love it, it's really good. the only problem I have with it is some of the words are hard to understand (A bit formal) hope to read more soon ...

hi most people prefer to read things if they don't have to download them. it could contain a virus (not saying that you would send a virus) and that stops ...